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does your poetry consist of
feelings nestled in ribcages
silent cries inside of a marrow
and the dull thunk of your heart
against my barely beating bones?

or is your poetry nestled in galaxies
shooting across well-kept fingertips
like comets lighting a dull sky
stardust of my hip bone wishes
literature universe coming to an end?

can your poetry play imagination
like a clever twist in a dream
where you kiss my shadows away
and teach me how to caress you
with love that burns passion away?

oh dear
are you smitten enough to
run away with me
or are you yet to be blanketed
by these heavy arms of mine?

do my words weigh you down?
i havent met one so easily drowned
by the vast sea of my sunkissed letters

but as your velvet lips whispered,
always is there a first.
i think i got carried away on fast moving winds
but this was entirely written using the most cliche terms i could find
aka words that are often used when writing poetry

which is not bad as all

i think it's overused because it sounds really nice

but it's really cool when you stumble upon poetry that either uses these words in a new way, combines them with some other term that just makes you think wow, or just uses new words altogether to bring new imagery to mind.

i dunno dudes
just write what tickles your fancy
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TheEmptyChest Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014

Thank you. I used to be quite the cliché-hunter. Every time I read something that rang "too familiar" I avoided it like the plague. And then one day it dawned on me: it's not what you use, it's how you use it. It's taking the mundane, the overused, and turning it into something unique to you.

 

You have a poem of clichés. And yet it's still its own poem. It stands out, and is beautiful.   

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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hi there! Just a note to let you know that I've featured this piece in my end-of-the-year journal feature :)
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blueheron93 Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013  Student Writer
Wow, this is great! So many writers get too caught up in trying to find phrases that have never been used before (forgetting that it's all been used before) and their art sometimes suffers for it. You illustrate that you don't have to say something that's never been said to say something beautiful. 
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Rewrote Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! c:
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ilyilaice Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2013
i must not lead a lot of poetry because i didn't even know these are cliches. O.O so i guess reading this was kind of educational. haha. nice one.
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Rewrote Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, thank you. cx
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Venry Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2013  Student General Artist
gorgeous work! CongraTS ON THE DD!
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:iconrewrote:
Rewrote Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
What??
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Venry Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Student General Artist

Omigod. I'm so sorry. :iconshameplz:

I meant DLD.

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:iconrewrote:
Rewrote Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ahahaa you're fine, I was just a bit confused :P Thank you!
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Venry Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013  Student General Artist
:glomp:
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AyeAye12 Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2013  Student Writer
This inspired by v-espertine's journal? ;P

Awesome stuff, I'm planning on doing a poem based on the trends/cliches she mentioned as well.
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Rewrote Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Nope, I haven't read v-espertines journal cx 
But haha, thanks! Have fun writing that poem!
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AyeAye12 Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Student Writer
I did, and its here if you want to read it :3; fav.me/d6gcu7q
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Rewrote Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, I'll check it out. cx
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2013
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:iconrewrote:
Rewrote Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hi there! Just a note to let you know that I've featured this piece in my journal :)
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Rewrote Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thanks a ton!
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pressed-rose-petals Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I see what you mean by cliche, but it does sound really nice. Quite lovely. :)
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:iconrewrote:
Rewrote Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. c:
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pressed-rose-petals Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:)
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toxicChemicals1 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013  Student Artist
OMG-!!! I LOVE IT-!!!!! >\\\\\\<
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:iconrewrote:
Rewrote Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!!
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toxicChemicals1 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013  Student Artist
Welcome-!!!!
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Ashes-Mari3 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Very beautiful. (^-^) :rose:
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:iconrewrote:
Rewrote Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you c:
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Ashes-Mari3 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome~! (^-^)
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crescentsi Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Cliche is a marvelous source of originality.
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Rewrote Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Exactly. Couldn't have said it better myself.
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BlueDiamondSnow Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh! This is supreme!!!
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Rewrote Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!!
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